An Important Day
Have you
ever thought that you know someone very well and then found out that you hardly
knew that porson at all ? this happened to me with my parents. I thought i knew
they well, until one day something happened that changed my attitude toward
they. Let me explain how i used to see my parents, what happened, and how it
changed me.
When I
was little, I was in foster care by the grandmother and the maid were at home.
my parents worked from morning to evening. when they go to work often I was
still asleep and when the designers back home they are too tired to play with
me. sometimes I envied my friends can play minimum with their mother. they are
too busy with their own world and forget about me.
And one
day, when I was playing with my friends, I had an accident were quite serious
and require me to in operation. I realized when I saw my parents were asleep on
the couch, I'm glad they were there with me, when they know I am aware they
walked toward me and call a doctor. my parents were very worried about my
condition, the next morning I thought they would leave me to work but it was not
only my father who left when I finished breakfast and come to be with me all
afternoon. while my mother accompanied me throughout the day. I was thinking I
hope I did not recover that my parents are always there and accompany me. till
I finally came out of hospital I thought I would be alone again and my parents
are busy with their work, but I was wrong because they still consider me and my
mother decided to stop working and focus on taking care of me. I am very happy
because they are actually very affectionate and caring with me.
From
then on, I learned two important things. First, I learned that even though my
parents seems it does not matter, they are a very caring person and cared for
me. Second, I learned that one must be very careful not to judge people. A
person might look hard on the outside but be quite different on the inside
Wow good experience. But yu i dont know which one your main idea
ReplyDeleteNice paragraph and good experience
ReplyDeletewow , really nice paragraph
ReplyDeleteIt is a cool composition girl :)
ReplyDeleteyou wrote it well
but it will be better i think if you change ' I thought they would leave me to work but it was not only my father who left when I finished breakfast and come to be with me all afternoon. '
becomes
" I thought they would leave me to work but it didn't happen,my father was the only one who left when I finished my breakfast and came to be with me all afternoon. "
good job ;)
Wow that's good article. for my oppinion maybe you can change "when they go to work often I was still asleep" supposed to " they worked when I was still asleep". Thankyou
ReplyDeletewow, its good article, but you used dificult word
ReplyDeleteNice article that you had described there. I think you need to check your article in the second paragraph. Especially about "when they go to work" into when the went to work". Actually i really like your article. Nice job :)
ReplyDeleteHi, Ayu. I think the word "they" in the third sentence (1st paragraph) "...that changed my attitude toward they" should be replaced with "them". Tq :)
ReplyDeleteHow sweet your parents are!
ReplyDeleteKeep writting
Hello Ayu
ReplyDeleteYour article is so nice. I just suggest you to pay attention with the capitalization letter for each first sentence. Because I think it's the one of important things to writing an article. That's all and have a good day :)
Hai ayu! It's amazing article but I think you have to fix in paragraph two "asleep" became "a sleep" keep writting😊
ReplyDeleteHello Ayu!!
ReplyDeletewhat a good article,girl. But I give you suggest for this one "when they know......" . I think you should change know to knew 😁 thank youuu
it;s a good idea to wrote it
ReplyDeletegood job:)
Comment back immediately please
ReplyDeleteHey baby I noticed a typo you did. I believe word that you mean with "porson" is actually "person"