A Future Teacher
Ratih really
like children, she is very tolerate children usual others say very annyoing
First of
all, Ratih likes working and play with children. She very enthusiastic when it
spoke to them, doing activities with them, and listening to their stories. Furdermor,
she cares about children alo. I think she would make a good teacher because of
these qualities.
Second,
Ratih very sensitive she will be sad to see children sad, she would do a lot of
ways that children can smile and laugh again and sometimes she was always able
to see the children who had a problem and always be a good listener and
adviser.
Finally,
Ratih is trustworthy and responsible. She always does wht she says she’s going
to do, she can always does what she says she going to do. She can always be a
listener, friend talk and advisory good for children can always make children
happy and cheerfull. She would be a wonderfull role model for young students.
1a. I think Ratih
wouldmake a good Teacher
1b.
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Main idea
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-likes play with children
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-very sensitive
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-trustworthy
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Supporting point
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-working with children
-very anthusiastic
-care about children
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-would do a lot of ways that children
can smile
- would do a lot of ways that children
can laught
-good listener
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-keep responsible
-friend talk
-advisory goood for children
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1c. Ratih is
my friend from Bali, this time she was studying in SARASWATI. Ratih very kind
and patient she many people profer because of it’s
2a. She cares
about childrenca lot
2b. Ratih very
sensitive and will be sadto see children sad
2c. Ratih is
trustworthy and responsible
Hello Novi,
ReplyDeletenice paragraph you have there. It's understandable and I love the way you tell us about your friend.
I just want to give some suggestions, correct me if I'm wrong ya. ^^
I think 'really like' in the first sentence should be 'really likes'.
'play with children.' should be 'playing with children'.
'she very enthusiastic'should be 'she is very'.
And sorry but I don't understand this sentence : she is very tolerate children usual others say very annyoing. ( :") )
Thank you! Have a great day^^
Ratih is a very positive person
ReplyDeleteit will be a suitable job for her in the future.
btw you may recheck some of your words like "Ratih very sensitive she will be sad to see children sad" better if you change it to be "Ratih is very sensitive. She will be sad if she sees children sad"
then it will be a gorgeous paragraph
keep writing girl ;)
Hai ayu, it's a nice paragraph. For first paragraph I Think 'furdermor' should be 'furthermore'. correct if I'm wrong okay..
ReplyDeleteGood job!!
Good work Novi! Keep learning😚
ReplyDeleteGood work Novi! Keep learning😚
ReplyDeleteNice paragraph ayu :)))
ReplyDeleteHi, Ayu. I think I saw some typos on the last paragraph. Nice article. keep it up
ReplyDeleteNice novi 😄
ReplyDeleteNice article, Novi but in the last paragraph i see the wrong typo like "wht" maybe you can change to "what"
ReplyDeleteGreat paragraph you typed there, Nice job!!!
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ReplyDeleteI think the first sentence should be "Ratih really likes children, she is a very tolerate children" rather than "Ratih really like children, she is very tolerate children" and "Second, Ratih very sensitive " should be "Second, Ratih is very sensitive." and don't forget to add a proper punctuation on every sentences to make it easier to read.
ReplyDeleteoverall, nice writing.
good job...maybe you have changed your blog
ReplyDeleteGood job ayu.
ReplyDeleteBut i think the step can you move to beginning