ESSAY
Thesis
: motivate students not liable lecturer
Argument 1 : lecturers different with teacher
Argument 2 : students are mature enough to find their own motivation
Argument 3 : campus is a way for us to become more mature
Counter argument : some say teachers should motivate students
Conclusion : lecturer obliged to motivate students, but returned to students
Many students who feel uncomfortable when lecturers or
older someone gave him motivation, because they think do not need the
motivation of some people because it would be futile. They prefer to seek and
find their own motivation. Because when they had entered the campus area they
consider themselves to be grown up and it's time for them to find their
identity.
Why different
lecturers and teachers? were they equally have a duty to provide or share the
knowledge they have? Teachers and lecturers actually the same position. What
distinguishes, teachers are the teachers who work in early childhood,
elementary, junior high, high school, Dikmen and formal Dikdas while lecturers
were teachers who served in the college. Both of these professions have
responsibilities vary. A teacher only duty is to educate students only, while a
teacher must educate and deepen science and technology to students.
Everyone
has their own way of stages or to look for motivation in his life. Sometimes
we'll get motivated to ourselves when we fail or when we fall. For example,
when we are thinking about a severe illness we will definitely motivate
ourselves to get better for the sake of the people we love and appreciate
health. But if we do not get sick we would have wasted our body to something that
is not berguma and harmful to ourselves.
Campus
is a picture of us in the real world is the world of work. On our campus at the
student and demanded to be mature and independent because the world of work is
a tough world and a lot of competition that we would find. The world of work is
very rare we get motivation from superiors or friends and therefore we have to
motivate ourselves Sendir, so we will be ready to face the duni work that
awaits us in the future.
Many
still assume that the lecturer responsible for the success or failure of the
students themselves. But the fact that determine our success in the future is
our own. For example, when the lecturer gives us a task to latian it our right
to do this task lecturers only gives us a way to further deepen our insight.
Students more listen to their own motivation in
compare their lecturers on campus. Usually they will not want considered to be
a child because according to them while they are students they always
considered themselves grown up and be accountable for themselves.
The conclusion was that the
lecturers are not forbidden to motivate students it signifies that the lecturer
is unbelievably care to students, but it returned again to the students.
because in college we need is the motivation of teachers, friends and parents
but is currently at work we will find a lot of experience that makes us find
our own motivation, and makes us more mature and independent.
Hi, Ayu, I can easily understand your article, it is a very awesome article and I think your skill in writing has improved a lot.
ReplyDeleteYour variety of vocabulary and grammar structures are not boring.
You are good at expressing your words into appropriate style of writing.
I think you need to recheck this sentence. "For example, when the lecturer gives us a task to latian it our right to do this task lecturers only gives us a way to further deepen our insight." Good job and keep it up :)
Im my opinion,the lecture can motivate their students,but it's not their responsibility.Your essay is very good.
ReplyDeleteHi, Ayu
ReplyDeleteYou write a good essay
I suggest you to make clear about your position of this motion in the first paragraph.
You should state that you agree or disagree about the topic in the first paragraph of your essay
Check the grammar again and it will makes your essay good and correctly
That is all and keep practicing
Hi ayu I like your article but I think you shouldn't put "who" in this word "Many students who feel uncomfortable"
ReplyDeleteYou can change it with "many students feel uncomfortable"
Ayu maybe yu have must to change this sentence "when the lecturer gives us a task to latian" to "when the lecturer gives us a task and practice" because they are in different meaning
ReplyDeleteHi.. Ayu
ReplyDeleteit's a good idea to wrote it. You should recheck in paragraph 3 " berguma" should be "Bergsma" because berguma is not in our dictionary.
thank you..
Hi Ayu
ReplyDeleteYou write a good essay
your grammar and vocabulary is nice
I can easily get the main idea from each paragraph
but i think you must recheck some other word like us the last sentence on paragraph 4
that is all from me
Thank You
.it is easy for me to understand your paragraph.it is very interesting.I agree with your point.Your variety of vocabulary and grammar structures are good. But i think we need to learn more.You are expressing your idea and position very clearly and you connect them effectively. Thank you
ReplyDeleteHi ayu, your article is easy to read. i feel confort when i read your article because i find the truth idea. your article is good, you can combine all to be perfect, your grammar is very good and also your vocabulary. you connect every sentence very well.
ReplyDeletethats all form me.
keep it up!
hello ayuu
ReplyDeleteyour paragraph is good enough. I do like to read it. but I want to suggest you to add 'her' in the first sentence of the third paragraph after "his". It can make readers easier understand what you mean. thank youuu
Hi Ayu :)
ReplyDeleteYou wrote good article! Your writing skill has improved, it's getting better and better.
Don't forget to put the underline to main topic and I saw there are some error grammar and structure. Pay more attention :) thank you
Hi, Novi. Your article is good actually. but sorry to say, I don't understand about this sentence " Campus is a picture of us in the real world is the world of work"
ReplyDeleteThank you.
hi ayu. i thing i agree with your opinion especially your opinion that "Everyone has their own way of stages or to look for motivation in his life" i thing that sentence ia absolutely ok.
ReplyDeletethank you.