MY GOAL IN PRESIDENT UNIVERSITY
Plan your
letter. Think of your three goals. Write a topic sentence for eact one
Goal 1 : get the best GPA
Goal 2 : get a great
internship
Goal 3 : to be better J
Write a
conclusion for your letter in the space provided. It should give an evaluation
of your goals
Conclusion: I have determined
three goals should I have achieved during my study at PRESIDENT UNIVERSITY. I
often hear people say if you want to succeed dream as high. Because the dream
you will know what the goal should be to accomplish as long as you live. And
dreams or goals can also train you to become more mature and make you more
useful. I believe my goals are not easy to wujutkan but by trying I believe God
will help me.
Now, on a
separate piece of paper, write a letter to yourself.
Would you read a bit of my goals
and how I was to realize a few of the many expectations do I have?
First, the first goals I want to
achieve is to have a high GPA. For the students as I would want the best GPA is
the biggest goals they wish to pursue. Because it does not deny the high GPA
will also be very influential when we are already at the stage of looking for a
job. But it has the same purpose is not to make you guys have the same way to
achieve it, I am not the type of person that smart, to achieve a high GPA I
have to study hard.
My second goals
is to get a good internship , PRESIDENT UNIVERSITY is a campus where every
student is obliged to follow an internship in the office or some companies that
cooperated with the PU, to achieve the goals of this one was easy bother. I
must have a good value for the subject that I need and look for a lot of my
relatives or friends in order to grow. Because sometimes we learn in college is
not the same as those we face in working life.
Goals are the last time I had to
change myself into a better one. Because it is possible in a very physical
business world in priority. So I will start to change myself little by little.
maybe I can start to organize my diet more searching for campus activities.
Conclusion: I have determined
three goals should I have achieved during my study at PRESIDENT UNIVERSITY. I
often hear people say if you want to succeed dream as high. Because the dream
you will know what the goal should be to accomplish as long as you live. And
dreams or goals can also train you to become more mature and make you more
useful. I believe my goals are not easy to wujutkan but by trying I believe God
will help me.
wow very beautiful dreams :)
ReplyDeleteI am sure you can reach it all
keep trying and do your best :)
I can understand your article well but,I think you need to improve the variation of vocabulary and grammar structure
you express your ideas clearly and effectively and you use an appropriate style and formal enough
btw I think you make a mistake at the sentence "how I was to realize a few of the many expectations do I have much better i think if you change it to be " how I try to realize a few of it"
Thankyou
have a good day ayu :*
Hello Ayu
ReplyDeleteI love all of your goals
Hopefully, you can achieve all of them
By the way, there are some words that I can't understand
For example :
- Goal 3 : to be better J
- "Goals are the last time I had to change myself into a better one." in the fourth paragraph
I hope that you can make it clear
Also, in the second paragraph which is "First, the first goals I want to achieve is to have a high GPA" it will be better if you change it into "The first goal that I want to achieve is to have a good GPA (Grade Point Average)"
I think that is all and don't forget to keep learning especially about the grammar
Have a nice day, beb
Your article is very interesting,your English make great progress.The vocabulary and grammar are good,but we still need to learn more.You connect these paragraph efficiently.Fighting.Best wishes.
ReplyDeleteHi Ayu!
ReplyDeleteI like your article. It was nice! I hope you can achieve all of your goals.
But I confused with some of your sentences. Maybe you can change "Goals are the last time I had to change.." Becomes "The last goal of mine is I have to change..." Thank you.
Hi, Ayu...
ReplyDeleteIt's a nice article. Your vocabulary and grammar also. by the way, would be better if you underline main idea from each paragraph so it will make the readers can easily understand the idea from each paragraph and also, I found the error word on the last paragraph such as, "I believe my goals are not easy to wujutkan but by trying I believe God will help me." OK, That's all from me.
Thank You.
I can understand your article well but,I think you need to improve the variation of vocabulary and grammar structure and then you express your ideas clearly and effectively and you use an appropriate style and formal enough. OK, That's all from me.
ReplyDeleteHi...
ReplyDeleteit's a nice article about your personal goal. I hope that you can accomplish them.
maybe you should recheck in paragraph 2. should be" My second goals are to get a good internship, PRESIDENT UNIVERSITY "
thank you
Hi, Ayu, you wrote a very nice article and I think that your English has gradually improved, but there are still some mistakes in grammar and vocabulary that you need to fix. One of them is 'My second goals is' which should be 'My second goal is'. It is good that you stated your main idea very clearly. Thankyou, good job, keep it up!
ReplyDeleteHi Ayu,
ReplyDeleteyour writing is good. I hope you are willing to keep learning to improve that.
You connect each paragraph well. I think you need to use more various vocabularies and revise some sentences. For example, the first goals. It should be 'the first goal is ...'
Also, I don't understand some sentences like : Would you read a bit of my goals and how I was to realize a few of the many expectations do I have?
And what is better J?
That's all I guess. Thank you and hopefully you are able to achieve all of them :)
Novi, it's agood paragraph buat I notice in the last sentence from your fourth paragraph,you didn't start your sentence with a capital word honey. That is just one little mistake that I notice from the whole. Maybe our friends already gave their help by noticing other imperfection. Goodluck!
ReplyDeleteHi! Ayu
ReplyDeleteIt’s a nice article. You make me easily to read. Your position in paragraph very well. But you have some errors ” "to wujutkan" I don't understand what you mean I think that will be better if you fix it.
keep practicing
good job😊